Thinking space

Think it through

You

Does this opening feel too slow, or is the quiet working?

Rita

The quiet is working. The first two sentences establish weather and isolation without explaining too much. “Mara kept writing anyway” gives the scene its first small turn, so I’d resist adding action earlier. If anything, the phrase “anyone in the house” hints at other people. That is useful if the tension is intentional.

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The Long Rain

The rain had been falling since before anyone in the house could remember. It softened the road, blurred the neighboring roofs, and made the windows feel less like glass than a thin membrane between one world and another. Mara kept writing anyway.